July 27, 2012

She's Dying.

Posted by Nirati at 8:18 PM
Author's Note : I know this is my first post on DOV and it should be something really sweet, but I came across this today in my 8th standard rough book, and decided to post it here! :D

She's Dying.

She's tired of the lies she's heard all of them say,
She's lost, she just cannot find a way.

She's seen them all smiling when she was smiling too,
And then they spoke their mean words, turned their backs
When her life was going off the track..

She learnt the hard way, that nothing and nobody are permanent.
That sometimes life gives you a rude shock,
It calls for your tears, your pain, it drives you insane.

But now she knows who will be there for her, and who all wont.
Now she's aware of the sink holes in her life.

Her mood is down in the trash, in the bin,
She's sick of feeling that way within.
She's this close to giving in.

If you know what to do, help her.
Because she is trying, but she knows she is failing. 
She's broken on the inside, and she is dying!

Grammar sucks, but understand the meaning! :P

So yeah, this was what I'd written once upon a time in 13-years-ville. :P


gunjan kumar on July 27, 2012 at 8:25 PM said...

written with delicacy ,and that too 13 yrs back.
Wonderful and touching poem
--Gunjan Sinha

Mystical Skeptical Me on July 27, 2012 at 9:24 PM said...

Welcome here! :D

We have a million shades, and this is as beautiful as something sweet! :) :)

Brilliant Job girl!! :D

Mystical Skeptical Me on July 27, 2012 at 9:25 PM said...

*Oh, and commendable thing to have written when you were in 8th grade!! :D *Cheers!*

Keirthana on July 27, 2012 at 10:43 PM said...

You wrote this when you were in 8th grade? :O Hats off! Superb flair for bringing in the right words for the right emotions :) Welcome :)


Kiara on July 28, 2012 at 5:16 AM said...

Grade 8 :O

It's fantastic, seems like you've always been an amazing writer! And this is a great first post! :)

maithili on July 28, 2012 at 10:10 AM said...

8th grade!!! You must have been one writer in the making :)
Actually I m happy that someone made an entry in a different way :)

Aditi Ray on July 28, 2012 at 9:51 PM said...

ohh... if this is something written in 8th grade... I'm waiting to read wat u can write now!! :D
cheers..!! :D

Swetha Shanmugam on July 29, 2012 at 12:30 PM said...

woohoo... Simply beautiful.. I read it over and over again :)

Ramya on July 29, 2012 at 7:02 PM said...

8th standard!!! astonishing!!! wonderful

Blahblaholic ♥ © on September 2, 2012 at 5:46 PM said...

@ Gunjan : No, only 4 years ago! :P Thank you so much.

@ MSM : THANKYOU! :D I was initially not going to post this, but went for it!

@ Keirthana : Aww, thank you so much for those lovely words :] x

@ Kiara : You flatter me :') Thank you so much!

@ Maithili : I would like to believe that. :D Achha good then, that this is my entry. :D

@ Aditi : Aww, thank you. :D

@ Swetha : Thank you, I'm glad you liked it :]

@ Ramya : Yes, 8th standard! :P And thank you.

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