January 14, 2012

.....just the beginning!! (Part II)

Posted by Aditi Ray at 10:07 PM
"Is there someone else?"
She didnt reply. None of them spoke. The silence was killing her. It was peircing her throat and she couldnt breathe. His eyes were fixed on her. He knew what the answer was, but was waiting to hear it from her, thinking, she may change her mind, she may prove him wrong. He wanted to be proved wrong. He wished he was wrong and she slap him for his ugly thoughts. But she didnt. She just didnt say anything. Nothing at all. He waited. It felt like eternity. He felt like shaking her wildly so as to make her speak. The silence was suffocating him. He couldnt stand it any longer. He asked again....
"Is there someone else you've been thinking of??"
This time she did speak. 
"Yes..."  
It was a loud whisper. Loud enough for him to hear it. He wasnt shocked or sad. He felt nothing. Nothing. He felt numb. He had no feelings left. Just numb.
"Who is he?"
His voice had no emotions left now. It was just a voice. A voice stiff as steel. A lifeless voice.
"John..."
Another loud whisper. He nodded. Her eyes never left the ground. 
"Since when.....?"
"Last month. You know whenever I went to hangout with him...."
He nodded again.
"So.... I guess, now there is no reason for us to be together anymore."
"No."
This time her voice was not a whisper. It was shaky. It was as if she was trying to hold back the lump forming in her throat. Her eyes still fixed to the ground, tears streaming down her cheeks. She didnt move. The only movement in her body was the tears running through her cheeks. They were out of control now and she didnt bother to stop them. None of them made efforts to hide the pain they felt.


"I wish you all the best with him... hope you find true love with him."
She shook her head, tears still blinding her view.
"No...." She managed without breaking her voice. She continued,
"....he has a gf. They are together for 4 years now. I am not doing this to be with him...!"
"ohh.. okay..."
He was clueless now. Still, the fact that she had made up her mind to end their one year long relationship was enough for him. He knew she woudnt change her mind with pleadings or persuasions. It never worked with her. She always made her decisions, no matter how weird or clueless they were.
He concentrated at her again. She still looked the same. Beautiful, just like she had been when he first saw her. He wondered what went wrong. He knew he'll never know. He still tried thinking. He could never figure her out... and today was just the same! She was shaking now. Tears covered her face, but still she looked beautiful, pure, untouched! 
He drew a step closer and held her in his arms. She was still shaking. He wondered why was he so calm. He was breaking up with the only girl he ever loved, and still he was calm?! But then, thats how things had always been when she was around. He always managed to surprise himself when with her. She was now sobbing uncontrollably. He did not stop her, just held her in his arms. He wondered again, maybe this was the last time he was hugging her.
"I.. am.. sorrryyy......"
Her muffled voice brought him back to reality. He just held her more tightly, feeling still no pain.



"Dont you hate me??" Her eyes were bloodshot.
"No." He shook his head. Smiled at her.
"All I want to say is.... Just dont mess up your life like this! Please... "
She still saw the same love in his eyes. She cursed herself!
"I've already messed it up...! No more!"
He nodded.
"Come.. let me drop you home!"
She walked back to the car silently, her hands locked in his. She wondered what made her feel so much more closer to him than in the last one year! She couldnt figure it out. She didnt need a reason. She just felt closer to him now.
"Are you still gonna talk to me?"
He started the engine and looked at her. She got her answer. 

They had overcome the biggest barier in a relationship. They no longer needed words to express themselves. Even though they broke up officially, they were now bound by a much powerful force of the universe. They both knew it was not the end... just the beginning of a new relationship between them. A relationship which didnt need any explaination, any name, any expectations! It was something between them today that they couldnt achieve in the past one year!

31 comments:

Smita on January 14, 2012 at 10:17 PM said...

life seriously becomes hell under such messed up situations.
hope the girl and the guy got ahead and now have a good life,if togehter then well and good and even if not together, still hope they r blessed with a happy life.

Aditi Ray on January 14, 2012 at 10:22 PM said...

I wish thm the same! :)

Aatish Sharma on January 14, 2012 at 10:27 PM said...

:O pretty emotional and surprising


*but hats off to the bf*


and just a piece of advise for the girl (from a male point of view)

dont leave the bf alone, be with him, talk with him even when he says he doesnt wants to (he actually wants to-male ego :P )

and do tell him about the *new relationship* between them, even if himself knows it, he'll really be relieved and liked it if he hears it from the girl herself
hope the girl and d ex-bf have a lovely bond henceforth.


and lastly, you've got some pretty amazing writing skills Aditi :)

Aatish Sharma on January 14, 2012 at 10:29 PM said...

btw, i almost forgot
what happens now between the girl and john??

Rupertt Wind on January 15, 2012 at 7:32 AM said...

That guy has some courage, Who is s composed in a break-up, isn't usually throwing and breaking stuff at each other?


I want to know the rest..

Aditi Ray on January 15, 2012 at 7:51 PM said...

@aatish... thankuu soo much!! :D
will surely keep ur advice in mind! Nd thnxx agn fr the male pt of view! :D
nd whoaa... u want more!! orite..seems like m pretty addictive! ;)
newamind.. u'll get more.. in my next post! :D

@ruperrt... yes! the guy is definetly very special nd one of the very best of ur kind! :D

Aditi Ray on January 15, 2012 at 7:53 PM said...

@aatish & ruperrt... fr the rest w8 fr my next post!

Aatish Sharma on January 15, 2012 at 8:09 PM said...

@aditi - woww..one more post..seems good..!
it's kinda becoming a trilogy.! :D :P
i hope the next post comes soon

Aditi Ray on January 15, 2012 at 8:25 PM said...

@aatish.. yes! u dont seem satisfied..so I hav to make it a trilogy! Lets hope u r satified with the trilogy! ;)
nd yes yes.. the next post will come soon! :D

Keirthana on January 15, 2012 at 8:29 PM said...

Situations do mess up our lives and we just go crazy not knowing which is right and which is wrong. And there are times when there is no right or wrong.

Anyway a lovely story. Nicely narrated :)

Aatish Sharma on January 15, 2012 at 8:34 PM said...

haha...i'm never satisfied with anything incomplete :P

hope the next post has a fair ending, cause not to forget, there is one more hidden character in all this...the gf of john

the girl has screwed up with the bf's life and to some extent her's as well...messing up the 4 year relationship of john and his gf should be the last thing (infact not even a thing :P ) on the girl's mind :) she should let her feelings for john let-go, just like the bf did and henceforth keep safe distance from john :)

but alas, that's my view :P

let's see the girl's view :)

Mystical Skeptical Me on January 16, 2012 at 9:41 PM said...

Okay, you write beautifully! :D The emotions, the guy's and the girl's...her tears, his pain...I could feel with them. Seriously, and the bond, new bond....yes, inexplicable...!! I loved it. *Hugs* :) :)

meoww on January 18, 2012 at 11:30 AM said...

whoa!!!! we just don't have a common name..!!
our stories are similar in a way too..!!
hmm..i know how it feels...been there..done that..
but the most beautiful thing is the magical bond..
noone can explain it..
i broke up with my ex some time back..
and we feel closer to each other now than ever before..
the relationship has now trespassed the norms of the universe and its an unspeakable bond now...which is the purest of the emotions ever..:):)
cheers to life sweetie..!!

Aditi Ray on January 18, 2012 at 8:21 PM said...

@aatish... wait till u see the girls pt of view!! :D

@MSM & @Meoww... I can swear on nethin tht I wanted u both to read to read these posts more thn ne1 since its the frst tym I've touched the genre of story-writting or narrating!! :D
thnkuu... :D

Nd.. I m inspired to continue it into parts..

@MSM & @meoww.. The frst part starts with the "Red sweater'.. Read it..! :D

Aditi Ray on January 18, 2012 at 8:22 PM said...

ohh i missed out Keithana... m sorry! I completely agree with u darling! sometimes there r no wrong n rite!! :D

Aatish Sharma on January 18, 2012 at 8:41 PM said...

@aditi - okay. waiting for the next post..hope its today..and i hope its the last part.! :)

Aditi Ray on January 18, 2012 at 8:51 PM said...

@aatish.. lets hope its today! and now its nt in my hands to end the story! The girl is no more me and the story is nomore mine! its just flowing now...

Aatish Sharma on January 18, 2012 at 8:53 PM said...

ohh..like it has become a fiction now?? great :)
But a real story has a different feeling, a different emotions :)
you can tell me in short here itself what happened with john and the girl in real :) too eager to know that :) if u dont mind. ;)

Aditi Ray on January 18, 2012 at 8:57 PM said...

:O u wer the one who inspired me to write more abt it but now u r discouraging me!! :'(

nd the gal n John... well.. just read on baba! *patience*

Aatish Sharma on January 18, 2012 at 9:00 PM said...

@aditi - am not discouraging you. You made me eager at first place by describing a real story. Now you saying the girl is no longer you and the story is no longer yours. So that leaves the real story incomplete to me. And i said it earlier, i dont like things being incomplete..hehe :)

so it wont be that interesting because it'll be fiction..pure dramatized situation.

so rather complete that real story and start a new series..completely fiction. :D

and i'm addictive reader, so wont discourage anyone from writing :)

Aditi Ray on January 18, 2012 at 9:03 PM said...

okay! so on second thots... i'l quickly complete this story.. but u may hav to w8 fr a few more posts fr the story to b complety complete!
nd thn as u said.. a fiction one! :D
thts cool! :D

so hopin u get the next part by tonite! :)

Aditi Ray on January 18, 2012 at 9:05 PM said...

btw... dont take it personal!
but I know something now... boys too enjoy gossip!! \m/

Aatish Sharma on January 18, 2012 at 9:08 PM said...

Okay great :D
so just to be clear, your next post is a real incident, right?

haha..keep that as a secret :P

and few more posts :O but i hope the bf's too there in them and something good turns out for him as well (in real life too) :)

Aditi Ray on January 18, 2012 at 9:09 PM said...

sshhh.... its a secret! read on.... ;)

Aatish Sharma on January 18, 2012 at 9:12 PM said...

@aditi - okay :P so post it asap, and do complete the 'complete' story asap (even in your real life) ;)

Aditi Ray on January 18, 2012 at 9:16 PM said...

sure!! :D
btw.. I hav a weird feeling like I know u!!

Aatish Sharma on January 18, 2012 at 9:18 PM said...

really? thats really weird. What made u think like that?

Aditi Ray on January 18, 2012 at 9:21 PM said...

just the vibe I get frm u.... like v hav a deep connection frm somewhr!

chill.. dont panic!
I m behaving like a physic sinc a few days.. dont let it affect u! :P

Aatish Sharma on January 18, 2012 at 9:24 PM said...

haha. okay. maybe because am showing too much interest in your personal life. Or maybe something else. But thats my nature.
Dont worry, now i'll comment directly on your new post now, so hope you post it tonight :P

Aditi Ray on January 18, 2012 at 9:26 PM said...

yup! :)

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